I see what you’re going for and I like the concept. Compositionally, this is a lot to take in at once. There’s a lot of words on the page but the variation in size, color, and layering – I can’t tell which I am suppose to read and which I’m suppose to glance over. Don’t lose the biggest point you’re trying to make by saying too many words. Try playing with your layer’s opacity, font choice/size/coloring – (possibly outlining some words vs not?). Overall, good start, good words, good concept – just play with the overall composition more.
I see what you’re going for and I like the concept. Compositionally, this is a lot to take in at once. There’s a lot of words on the page but the variation in size, color, and layering – I can’t tell which I am suppose to read and which I’m suppose to glance over. Don’t lose the biggest point you’re trying to make by saying too many words. Try playing with your layer’s opacity, font choice/size/coloring – (possibly outlining some words vs not?). Overall, good start, good words, good concept – just play with the overall composition more.